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 Posted: Tue Jun 02, 2009 8:12 pm Post subject: Love poem-Zureyma |
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now tell me that's not good(actually tell me it's great) :D
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| Posted: Wed Jun 03, 2009 12:52 am Post subject: |
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Reminds me of mine.
So don't you worry about being alone,
I'll always be with you just give me a phone.
My heart says that you are true,
I'll always be there just for you.
You seem to have adapted what I said and editied it some what. Most interesting, I will let the poem analyzer, Amarah, come along and judge it.
So are you with this Zureyma?
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| Posted: Wed Jun 03, 2009 7:05 am Post subject: |
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| [HSP]@uToPL@y wrote: | Very poetic, I'm sure your friend thought so too!
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Bah, mine is better :)
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I like this one more than Chris's, mainly because it contains more truthfull statements and feelings.
However, I dislike how it's more "Rhyme-to-rhyme"
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| Posted: Wed Jun 03, 2009 9:44 am Post subject: |
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| [HSP]Sonix*NL* wrote: | I like this one more than Chris's, mainly because it contains more truthfull statements and feelings.
However, I dislike how it's more "Rhyme-to-rhyme" |
More truthful?! Are you saying mine was filled with bullshit and lies?
How can you compare feelings? You have no idea what me and See both feel for our other halfs...
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| Posted: Wed Jun 03, 2009 10:41 am Post subject: |
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Yeah yeah Chris I know you have issues with me having opinions, get over it.
"Floats like a vessel" "Much like a crackling fire" "Seed of life"
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| Posted: Wed Jun 03, 2009 12:01 pm Post subject: |
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Opinions are freely expressed but rarely heeded, due to their ambiguous nature.
Although, constructive criticism should always be taken with a grain of salt - as it usually points out some flaw based on the perceptions of a single person.
If it matters, I like both - especially since they are unique in their form & factor.
While both are not perfect, they do project a very true feeling of love and happiness from within - which few people ever express in a public venue.
Nice SIG! BTW! 
IMO: Creativity is a good thing, and should be nurtured.
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| Posted: Wed Jun 03, 2009 12:18 pm Post subject: |
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yeah i wrote it in 3rd period (class) yesterday... any i gave it 2 her... i kept a copy and made it into a poem :P
zureyma is awesome :P
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| [HSP]Sonix*NL* wrote: | | "Floats like a vessel" "Much like a crackling fire" "Seed of life" |
I was using metaphores to describe our relationship!
"a figure of speech in which an expression is used to refer to something that it does not literally denote in order to suggest a similarity"
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you tell em chris.. :P
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| see3200 wrote: | | you tell em chris.. :P |
Your poem was good, not many guys would take the time to write one, girls like that stuff. So are you and Zureyma together?
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| Posted: Wed Jun 03, 2009 2:38 pm Post subject: |
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yeah... 9 months :P
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[insert pregnancy joke here]
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| [HSP]Sonix*NL* wrote: | | [insert pregnancy joke here] |
LMAO!
I've only been with Rachel since Saturday (BG/GF wise) and we hope to expand that into the forever :)
I never knew you had a GF, See.
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